@Bluedemonwolf
--Trees:
Okay, repost with the edits provided and you'll be good to go.
@Joshuality
Okay, please repost the awakened with the edits added in and you'll be approved.
--Treasure:
X marks - Is there actually any treasure at the spot? Does something conjure up? Does she sense treasures - and if so, then, does the power stop working when there are no more treasures to be had? What constitutes "a pony's treasure"?
Hidden Treasure - I need more defining characteristics for what treasure is here, since you specified she can't sense ponies. Can she sense other things important to her, or is it only things traditionally considered of high monetary value?
It'll Cost Ya - Extreme compulsion effects are not allowed, especially not as a group action. You are able to make other ponies feel a gentle compulsion that would make them more likely to believe whatever reasons she might give them explicitly re: giving up a treasure, but that would be it (mind control is a no no). It also would not be able to affect a group, and something of such value I'd say she wouldn't be able to place the effect on more than one pony a day if it's as strong as we allow in shop.
Quick Scrutiny - Is it ANY item or again, only things traditonally considered of high value?
Make it a Double - Too powerful as is. Needs restrictions to bring it into the domain (as currently she could technically duplicate a *living creature* which has nothing to do with treasure). Also needs size limits. Also needs extreme scaling back, from once a day to once a week or even month depending on your size limits set. May also need limits on the duplication of magical items - after all, what if she came into contact with The Most Powerful Wand and duplicated it? Or the Most Expensive Items and sat there for a day making dupes for herself? Definitely world-breaking bb. XD;;
@Fuzzy-Corgi
--Chivalry:
Unshaken courage - Okay, the issue here is that you're using one power as both an aura and a targeted effect. Let's make it 50 feet for up to 5 ponies at the limits you set. If you'd like a larger/area/rally the troops effect in a larger area, it'll need to be more restricted in no larger than a 50 foot radius around him - your choice of if it's active less often or a smaller effect (ie, feeling just a bit more resolute vs WARCRY YEAAAAAAAH). It'll need to be a separate power, but you have an extra slot, so that shouldn't be an issue.
Defensive peace - You don't need to note "leaves the alicorn drained." We don't take that into account in power approvals. This is fine though!
Trust in me is good!
Readiness to help is good with the bit removal. You can remove the bit about the alicorn having doubts as again we don't take those things into consideration when balancing.
CHANGE: change domain from chivalry to knights / knighthood. Chivalry itself is more about the manner of thought and behavior associated with knights and nobility, while your powers relate to the actions closer to [/i]being a knight.[/i]
@Tigeria
Adventure - approved
Fruit -
Fruit growth - does the fruit grow at a 'normal' pace, just much larger? So they could wander through a fruit grove and bless a couple of fruits every day, but not get them until harvest time?
Fruite preservation - change it to read more along the lines of "triples fruit shelf life," since different fruits decay at different rates! Stored in ideal conditions, an apple can last months, but grapes do not, for instance. Also, I feel like you can expand the radius to 20ft for this.
@bitsie spider
the Morose - approved
@PeterPan_da144
It's us getting everything organized and on one site / in one thread.
Mischief is approved, although I needed the link where Nym approved things. For the Moon, she asked you for clarification I see in the post where she responded. That was your initial posting, but staff had questions about it. If it was never finished, we'll have to do it over again.
@-Ghastly Demise-
--Nightmares:
Fear Feast - How often can she learn a pony's fears, and once she does can she induce nightmares on them any time in the future of the same fears?
Night terror - How often can she do this? Also, you could probably just combine this into fear feast and make it simply that when she induces nightmares, it tends to be of their deepest fears. These are so close I'd call them duplicates really.
Nightmare wail - Bring it down to a 20ft radius. Also, you mention that it wears off when they awaken, but you also mention daymares. How does this work? Are the ponies hallucinating? Do things seem real to them? How often can she do this?
Night mirror - How often and how close does the target need to be for her to read their nightmares?
Dream eater - not allowed, as this is an "opposite power." She can't remove what she's the alicorn of. o vo
Night of terror - Since I don't think ponies have the same calendar system as us, the whole date thing doesn't work; you could say once a year, maybe. Also, I'm a little confused, as targeting one pony really just makes this like nightmare wail as written. Suggestion on saying once a year is fine, but the nightmares manifest around her in a set radius (30ft?) and can induce extreme fear or momentary paralysis onto anyone viewing them. The nightmares fade at dawn or when she moves such that a pony isn't in the radius anymore (since the nightmare would follow her).
Extra - Nightmare aura - since dream eater won't work and night terror / fear feast can really be combined into one, you could add this as another power. Suggested that it only works either at night or when the ponies inside are very tired / on the edge of sleep, like their nightmares are trying to get to them early. < v<
@Straye
--Shepherd -> name change to Shepherds
Safeguard - The combat shielding seems a bit off thematically, as shepherds do shelter and guide their flock but typically do not directly shield them as such. I think it would be more appropriate to theme it around the idea of perhaps environmental shelter? Protecting them from heavy rains, heat, cold, etc. A shepherd's fence often doesn't protect from a wolf's fangs, after all.
Oversee - How does this relate to shepherding? Particularly the projecting their image, but scrying in general.
Illuminate - How often can this be done, and how far away can the path go? Does the alicorn need to know the destination themselves (aka, has been there before)?
Vanguard - I would suggest a rework, as often flocks do not follow the shepherd, they're
herded from behind. Perhaps more of an activated aura effect that urges those in front of the alicorn in the direction desired.
Counsel - In their sleep would not be allowed, as the domain has nothing to do with sleep/dreaming. A shepherd can't do anything for a sleeping sheep! Thematically overall the power is fine, however, what actually -is the power-? Is it just detecting that something is 'lost'? What defines lost - is it the pony themselves feeling lost for some reason? Does the alicorn have some sort of magical ability to know what to say (as they really should not w/ the domain be able to just KNOW what's wrong) or do they just trust their gut and that's not part of the power? Is this something they can sense all the time or do they have to activate it purposefully?
Locate - Wisps and scrying do not fit within the domain. They are not a domain of any sort of divination. They also have no power dictating they can astrally project. I like the idea of finding the lost sheep, but you'll need to work it more into the domain you've chosen, such as just simply having a sense of where they might be or maybe being able to follow their footsteps magically to find them.
NOTES: I understand the theme you're going for here, but your powers need to be thematically restricted into the domain. We encourage creative thinking (the lost sheep aspect is a good one) but the actual -powers- should relate too. Shepherding has no relation to any kind of divination powers and so those simply wouldn't manifest in the way described. :3
@belloblossom
--Theft:
Thieves' tools - Only lockpicks, or any traditional lockpicking tool. There are several. :B How often can this happen, and is it restricted only to similarly sized objects?
Sleight of Hoof - How often, maximum item size?
Ooh, shiny! - What dictates the price? Many valuable goods might have several prices across different regions. Or is it based on what she could sell it for with her contacts? How often can she do this?
Light on her Hooves - thumbs up
Blending in - thumbs up, you could extend this and light both up to 15 minutes w/ a one day recharge :3
CHANGE: domain to thieves/thievery or remove light on her hooves / blending in. Those don't correspond to theft directly but actions of thieves.
@PZMJNP
--Comfort:
Approved :3
@Ruler
--Paranoia:
Something to infect a pony with a lasting paranoia - the feeling of being followed, or thinking they see something around corners, etc, could be interesting. Wouldn't be usable super often, but definitely thematic.
Maybe an ability to cause a group of ponies to feel distrustful of each other - paranoia is very much related with thinking that others are lying, out to get them, etc. Would cause that feeling to start creeping up in the back of the ponies' minds for the duration. Similar to Shifting Thoughts but different in that it's not just questioning things said per se, it's specifically being paranoid in various ways of the other ponies in that particular group for a set amount of time.
--Clarity:
I think you could definitely work in clarity from mind altering affects or madness, even if only temporarily. Giving them clarity in perception. Whether or not this would counteract another alicorn's powers issss I guess up to you guys lmao. I don't know that it could cure hallucinations, but you could definitely have a perception clearing effect for x time so often or an aura effect for sure!
-- Heartbreak:
I think those work. How often can they be activated, like how many times per day?
@Hattaki
--Confusion:
Ever shift - just for tonality, as he's not an alicorn of hallucination or anything of that nature, would it not be more appropriate to have the effect be more akin to ponies are confused what they're looking at when viewing him? They see him properly, but they just *don't understand it* when they're within the effect radius. They thought they knew, but now they don't??? ?? ?????
Never clear again - how often can this be done?
@houllow
--Secrets: (your names are long so using numbers lol)
1. Understanding them is fine, becoming fluent in them is not. They're not an alicorn of knowledge or anything of the sort, so there's no reason they'd be able to absorb that knowledge from a small sample. Think of it more like having auto-translate for ciphered information, that's fine. How often can they do this/read texts in such a manner? How long does the ability last? (Simply being able to understand ANY AND ALL ciphers ALL THE TIME seems a bit overpowered. ; v; )
2. This is fine. How often can this be done?
3. Everyone has secrets. :B So what defines setting it off / giving any sort of indication that it's an important secret to know? (I do mean this seriously - everyone has some silly secrets from childhood or whatnot so at what degree does that white noise separate from notable blips?) Is this an aura or an activated power, and how often is it used?
4. How often or at what distance if aura?
@Bouquet of Diamonds
--Inheritance:
RAG - So ... they don't HAVE to be passed on? Does the object just blip out of existence if they steal something from a long lost living relative? XD Or in general, really - if the ancestor owned a super valuable painting that has since been put into a museum, does it just disappear? Is the recipient now just a felon because they have stolen goods? O uO lmao also, how often can this be done and what's the size limit on objects?
YGWYGAYDGU - Definte "ability." Is it an activated soothing power, an aura, etc. How is it a power per se and not simply a manner of speaking?
D/B - Would need to be reworked to deal with the domain, more of a "can tell if they stand to gain an inheritance or not, currently".
IP - How often can this be done, max size limit, and a hard definition on how many times it needs to be passed down in order to be restored.
SW - What if there isn't an item of such, or no stash? What if it's something like my question in RAG, where it's been passed into someone else's possession? What if they have no ancestors that have ever owned something 'of a high price'? Also, how often can this be done, and what's the maximum size limits?
APPROVED:
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Adventure |
the Morose |
Mischief |
Comfort